Wednesday, April 1, 2015

Week 11 Storytelling: Arjuna the Archer

Arjuna took a deep breath and stood up when his name was called. He went by the name of Karan since he was disguised as a Brahmin after he and his brothers had escaped the trap fire set by Duryodhana. Arjuna slowly walked up to where the magnificent bow lay, nervous but confident at the same time. This bow was the talk of legends! No one had managed to string the bow yet, let alone shoot it at a moving target. If he could do it, HE’D be the talk of legends AND he’d win Draupadi, the daughter of King Drupada.

All day, Arjuna had watched countless men walk up to the bow confident as can be and struggle to even pick it up! Only a few had been able to actually pick it up and attempt to string it and no one had successfully strung the bow yet. Arjuna placed his hand on the bow and a strange sensation washed over his body. It felt as if he and the bow were meant to be, that this bow had a special connection with him. With this feeling surging through him, Arjuna knew he could win the competition. He easily picked up the bow and proceeded to string it. The string was taut and hard to stretch out to its full length. It took all of Arjuna’s strength to pull the string long enough to reach both ends of the bow to hook it on. He finally managed to do it and the string snapped into place with a nice click! The crowd stared on in amazement and wondered how such a normal Brahmin like himself had managed to do something that had yet to be accomplished.

Now came the easy part for Arjuna as he had never doubted his ability to shoot down his target. He thought back to his training with Drona and let that be his motivation to succeed. The tricky part was aiming correctly because the objective of this test was to shoot the spinning target by looking at the reflection of it through a puddle of water. Arjuna stood up feeling powerful as ever and the crowd looked on in awe, as if they could feel the power emanating from him. He aimed his bow upwards toward the target and looked downward into the puddle to stabilize his aim. Once ready, he took a deep breath, closed his eyes, and shot the arrow.

He opened his eyes to the crowd gasping in awe and cheering for him. He had done it! King Drupada walked up to him with his beautiful daughter following right behind him.

“What a show you have put on!” he roared with a huge smile on his face. “You are fit to be the husband of my daughter now. Do you accept?” he asked.


Arjuna said yes and the crowd cheered and whistled for the two! From this day on, Arjuna was known as the mighty archer and his tale lives on forever!



Author’s Note: I chose to write about this scene because Arjuna is one of my favorite characters when it comes to Indian Epics. I thought this scene accurately portrayed Arjuna’s excellence in archery and I just wanted to tell it in my own words. The ease with which Arjuna accomplished this major feat should be noted because everyone who attempted prior to Arjuna failed miserably. This section is also the reason how Draupadi ends up marrying the Pandavas.

I told this story more from a scene I had seen in a television series that was a rendition of the Mahabharata. I thought it was more interesting than the book in my opinion although they were similar. I kind of see it as Arjuna’s starting tale to glory and fame! He’s known for his skills in archery and war and this is a good portrayal of those characteristics that he possesses in my opinion.

I chose this image for my story because I thought it was a very intriguing portrayal of Draupadi’s swamyavara. The fish spinning on that wheel was how the target was portrayed in the television rendition that I saw. It doesn’t show the puddle of water however, that Arjuna uses to aim at the target.

Bibliography: Buck, William (1973). Mahabharata.

Arjuna wins Draupadi; Wikimedia Commons

7 comments:

  1. Hello again Parth,
    I really liked in your story how you were talking about the connection that Arjuna had with his bow. You had explained that it was like a special connection and that Arjuna had a special surge that surged through him whenever he picked up the bow. With all of that foreshadowing I knew that he was going to hit his target with ease. Good story I really enjoyed it this week.

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  2. I love stories that begin in medias res! You did that quite well while also tying in relevant setting and character information. It's a great way to hook the reader.

    Your attention to detail is excellent, and the importance of each moment in the story is portrayed vividly. I love how Arjuna feels this connection to the bow, and this moment amounts to so much because of how detailed it is, indicating its significance to Arjuna.

    Wonderful writing, Parth! I did not notice a single error, and I am a fairly nit-picky editor, so that is saying a lot ;) lol. You wrote concisely but with a great wealth of detail and description, which really involves the reader's vision of the story. This is definitely up to par with the original story!

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  3. Hi Parth, I really enjoyed your storytelling for this week. I did not do this particular reading so I had never heard the story, but I thought that you gave a lot of detail so that even someone who had not read the original could keep up. One thing I would have liked to see would have been more detail about how the archers before him had failed.

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  4. Parth,

    This was quite an intriguing section out of the Mahabharata – I’m glad that you chose to write over it. I can’t even imagine what it must have been like to watch as a seemingly ordinary person walked up and strung and drew the bow, then shot the target while it was moving. I’m sure several jaws dropped. That is quite an intriguing image you chose! Overall, well done here.

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  5. Hi, Parth! This is a great story to include in your portfolio. The writing is excellent! You are so good with detail. I really enjoyed this part in the book, so I like that you told it with more insight into just what Arjuna was thinking and how he was feeling during such an epic scene for him. Truly, the detail was fantastic. I had such an easy time imagining the whole thing, the way you told it. It made me like Arjuna even more! I also think you chose a great image to go with it. It definitely aids the reader in further imagining the scene, even though you already paint a very vivid picture with your story alone.

    I have already read some of the other stories in your portfolio, and you have done a great job with the whole project. You have four very, very good stories here, and they were all super enjoyable to read. I think you are a very skilled writer.

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  6. Hey Parth! This story is really good! In the Mahabharata it all happens so quickly. Arjuna walks up, strings the bow and shoots the target. There wasn't much detail to the story, so I'm really glad you went into detail with it! You wrote very concisely and got to the point, but you still had such great detail! Your description of the scenery and the events was excellent and it made me feel like I was right there watching Arjuna try to string that bow! What an amazing feat of strength that must have been. So many of the men failed to even pick up the bow, yet Arjuna did it with ease. Overall your story flowed well, and I didn't notice any errors in it! You did a great job with details adding just enough, and not overwhelming the reader. You didn't stray much from the original story in the Mahabharata, but you added many details that fill in blanks in the original story and help really immerse the reader! Excellent job!

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  7. So, I loved this story!

    Your detail is amazing. It definitely creates some wicked imagery. You sectioned off your writing well and I liked your use of capitalization. Both helped your story flow well.

    I found your author’s note helpful! I have always been fascinated with archery, so it was fun to see this scene in detail. Also, it was interesting that you based your piece off of a t.v. series!

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